There we go, I re-wrote chapter twenty, altering a few scenes, and adding some more in. I still think this isn't the best chapter, but I believe I got rid of the most glaring of the mistakes. I will be reworking some chapters in the future because of this and other things that have been brought to light, but that's the good thing about updating one chapter at a time - it gives me a chance to edit once I realize what's gone wrong.

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